Early morning smoke...

Something about this image bothers me, and it's not just 'cos I edited the s*** out of it... It feels canted to me in a way that is uncomfortable on my eye... but it doesn't seem to matter how I adjust the angle... if I get one line comfortably straight, another one goes off! Help???
I had the same thing with a beach shot this morning- couldn't get the lines to align. Maybe here it's the strong diagonal attacking the smoker who then rolls away on the bike wheel behind him. A sense of potential chaos? Too much weight to the left? What do I know!
posted June 12th, 2012  
@carolinedreams "potential chaos" is an apt descriptor of everything i know right now! maybe i just need to embrace the chaos and go with the flow... or maybe i should just stand in the middle of the square and start screaming "serenity now" ;p
posted June 12th, 2012  
@northy Yes, please scream, in the square, as a silent selfie. Urban therapy.
posted June 12th, 2012  
I don't know, I like all the lines and chaos. Lots going on and he is oblivious. I think it is a great photo.
posted June 12th, 2012  
@newbie tx Stacey... altho' i'm not sure how oblivious he really was... i am pretty sure he saw me, and may even have guessed that i was photo-ing him, and not just the arches... altho' who knows... so far the only one who has ever come close to calling me out is the street preacher and I'm still not sure if his comments were directed at me, or at the multitudes with cameras ;p
posted June 12th, 2012  
I dunno, I don't see the flaw in this photo. I like the contrast of lines going off in different directions in this. It's interesting.
posted June 12th, 2012  
i actually love this. i love the empty space to the right and the focus, too
posted June 12th, 2012  
I don't see the flaw with the lines. Great candid capture!
posted June 12th, 2012  
I like this photo, except that his legs distract me. I often think that men look funny with their legs crossed. Weird? Maybe. My eyes go right there though. Live everything else. :-)
posted June 12th, 2012  
Great b&w
posted June 12th, 2012  
@5unflow3r right... next time i'll tell him to uncross them... ;p ba haa haaaaa! tx Trina... that would never have occurred to me (or i might have waited around to see if he DID uncross them!!!)..
posted June 12th, 2012  
I like it too. I love how the focus pulls to the left. The chaos works. That being said, I have felt the same way about some of my photos and not been able to put my finger on why.
posted June 12th, 2012  
I dont know what you're talking about :) The lines and weight is awesome. I noticed them and liked them right from the thumbnail.
I was going to say crop off a tiny bit off the left to the edge of the chair but then you'd lose the bike wheel so, ignore that. I think its awesome.
posted June 12th, 2012  
@northy Had another look... It's still the legs. :-) those jeans make them a funny shape. :-)
posted June 12th, 2012  
As the ones above already said, the lines are great. I like that it's uneasy on the eyes, makes it all the more interesting.
posted June 12th, 2012  
When I look at the lines and patterns, I'm not looking at the man. When I look at the man, I'm distracted by the lines and patterns. But It's a fantastic candid shot, I like how he looks, as if lost in his own world. 8)
posted June 12th, 2012  
I can see what attracted you to this. I like that you have got down low and used the seat as a leading line. It could have been a nice restful street scene. But the problem is those thick lines (concrete structures) leading from the guys head He is positioned perfectly in the foreground so my eyes go straight to him as they should. Then they are immediately dragged up by the curved one and out of the frame. Or they are pulled right by the other one and out again. I bring my eye back again and it can't settle on the guy and I can't easily examine the other parts of the image either. It is a very unsettling effect. Also they might have a better chance of settling on the guy's face if there were more contrast between it and that background. It was worth a shot. I hope this analysis isn't more than you wanted!
posted June 12th, 2012  
Is it because they are smoking?
posted June 12th, 2012  
I like the idea and processing - I think what's happening is that your eye wants to settle on the guy walking around in the background or the flag and they're not the focus, You've more or less given a composition with those lines that does that golden ratio curve which takes your eye away to the right.
posted June 12th, 2012  
It is unsettling you are right but what's wrong with that? I like it, I think the guy likes himself a bit perhaps because he looks a bit like a modern Serge Gainsbourg :))))
posted June 12th, 2012  
I think the diagonal line from hand unsettles but that is a good thing if the smoking is creating image of discomfort
posted June 12th, 2012  
Not too bothered about the 'chaos'. I think it would be stronger if his feet were in the shot. That's just a personal opinion and not exactly and educated one!
posted June 12th, 2012  
I really like it :o) xx
posted June 12th, 2012  
hum.....i think it's the two beams. i think they are distracting, but there isn't much you can do about those now is there.
posted June 12th, 2012  
sometimes i wish i could smoke so i could be on such photos as yours :)
nice contrast on this one ;)
posted June 12th, 2012  
Well i love it!.....The focus is on the smoker & the rest is just added interest!......Awesome capture!! : ]
posted June 13th, 2012  
@yrhenwr tx David... that's very helpful... yes, i think that's what's happening with my eye too, and maybe that's the problem more so than the fact that the lines might be canted...

@johnnyfrs @peterdegraaff i am not a smoker, but as long as i am not breathing in someone else's smoke, seeing this kind of image doesn't bother me... i realize the issue of smoking is huge (right up there with politics and religion ;p) and i have little interest in wading into it...

@365slfportraits Lidac, you don't have to be smoking to be in my photos... you just have to be in toronto... at city hall... or yonge dundas square ;p
posted June 13th, 2012  
Great candid capture. I think it's the diagonal beam that seems to pull things awry visually - but that's not a bad thing.
posted June 13th, 2012  
Love this!
posted June 13th, 2012  
my very untrained eyes say.. coool shot... and I too do not like men to cross legs like a woman..
posted June 13th, 2012  
@5unflow3r @cheribug ok... i am now forever going to be checking out how guys cross their legs... there will be oodles of photos for comparison purposes... and i will tag you to come see all of them... hee hee hee... this is cracking me up... but seriously, i really do appreciate the repsonses... i find these different perspectives so very interesting... it would not have occurred to me to fuss about this... what DID occur to me was that this is a guy who is tightly wound up and probably really needs that morning smoke!!!
posted June 13th, 2012  
@northy both my boys, my ex-husband and his dad all cross the legs like this. I cannot fathom it being comfortable.. and I do harass my kids about doing it.. -) So bring on the leg crossers...
posted June 13th, 2012  
I really like this! Awesome candid!
posted June 13th, 2012  
A great shot. The lines of the background creates a great contrast to the smoker. Like how thoughtful he seems.
posted June 13th, 2012  
I like your shot very much. My eyes start at the man and wander - leaded by the lines -to the right and back again to the man. Great.
posted June 14th, 2012  
Maybe it's supposed to be uncomfortable because that's the feeling you get when you see young people smoking.
Great shot :)
posted June 17th, 2012  
I like the lines of the bench leading you in and all of the lines in the background. The only thing that jars slightly with me is the bike wheel behind him.
posted June 19th, 2012  
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