prowling; stalking prey - flightless waterfowl doomed by northy

prowling; stalking prey - flightless waterfowl doomed

taking another run at this for the camera settings challenge based on feedback from yesterday... i'm ambivalent... i kind of liked the negative space, but i think this may be workable as well... and unlike yesterday's effort, this one works big on black...

again, played a fair bit with dof, placement of light and figures relative to each other in an attempt to achieve the result i was after --> the sense of danger lurking in the shadows... ya'all can tell me if i succeeded or not ;p
http://365project.org/discuss/themes-competitions/23750/csc14-15-story-telling-through-dof-composition-and-lighting#comment-693272

really appreciated the constructive feedback from yesterday... tx!
He truly has a frightened eye...love the dof and the perfect blur...well done! :) fav
October 8th, 2014  
penguin's in biiiiiggggg trouble now!
October 8th, 2014  
Nice dof! Scary scene.
October 8th, 2014  
Super cool shot !!
October 8th, 2014  
Cool b&w
October 8th, 2014  
Neat b&w shot.
October 8th, 2014  
I think it is closer an I like the position of the subjects. There is seperation between the two and the DOF is nice.

In not convinced on the composition... I might have to download and test out some crops to see what works but I get the feeling that if you have one subject in the 1/3 position and the other in the 2/3 position it would look better.

Now having said that you might find that you might get more space or at least the feel of more space on the right due to the size of the subject.
October 8th, 2014  
great. i like this better than the other one, though i like them both
October 8th, 2014  
This one utilizes the frame better than the previous version. This is easy to "read" because there is a clear flow of things from left to right over the whole frame.
I see what @agima is saying, but rather than thinking about thirds, I'd think about where the tiger is heading / looking at. To me it seems that the tiger is looking at something in front of the penguin.... So maybe you want to try to move the tiger to the left a bit, or just turn it to face the camera a bit more... up to you.

I would also add some empty space around the frame (just look at this image on black background, so much more awesome because of the black empty space....)

Anyway, I love this story. It makes me think of Wile E. Coyote and Roadrunner.... So I guess an anvil will drop on the tiger in the next image :)
October 8th, 2014  
great fun, i can see what Jani is saying about where the tiger is looking.
October 8th, 2014  
@janim I can't put my finger on it as I have only looked at it on my phone but I think that might be it.
October 8th, 2014  
I really like the position of the cat/sabertooth tiger in this image compared to the other...but I really liked how you had the negative offset space to the right in the first pic better than placing the penguin there...it made me think that the penguin was trying to go or was looking in that direction and it pushed my view that way to see if there was something there to see. Both are still great pics!
October 8th, 2014  
I like this one but I think the composition could be somewhere between the two. Less negative space on the other shot to the right but a little more than on this shot so the penguin has got somewhere to head into.
October 8th, 2014  
your penguins are super cool. ;)
October 8th, 2014  
@janim @macromover @tasian @agima tx guys... one particular limitation is that the gaze of the tiger really doesn't fall where i think it needs to given the relative sizes of the two figures... i think i need to come up with a totally different concept... but i really really appreciate the thoughtful feedback on this... i've found it to be tremendously helpful...
October 9th, 2014  
This version is much more menacing. I caught the intention and feeling of the tiger at first sight this time. I think the angle of the teeth does it. I guess I like it better.
October 9th, 2014  
@northy cut the penguin and paste it to the perfect place for the tiger to catch. Fill the blank areas with black. Problem solved ;)
October 9th, 2014  
Intriguing. Clever lighting.
October 9th, 2014  
Yes, I think this does work better
October 10th, 2014  
lol...cool
October 14th, 2014  
So far behind on your album, but just saw this in the DOF storytelling and wanted to stop in and say how much I liked it.
October 20th, 2014  
I like this one best out of the two, there is more sense of drama here.
October 28th, 2014  
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