Critique welcomed

April 13th, 2010
I have been working on trying to show more emotion in my photos. I would really appreciate your thoughts and comments on this



April 14th, 2010
Hi Jayne. I don't believe that this person was actually crying from looking at this image....it doesn't look "true" enough to me.
April 14th, 2010
I agree with Rochele, the dribble of eyeliner says tears but the eyes and mouth don't.
April 14th, 2010
i think ive maybe over complicated it... i was trying to acheive the hopeful feeling just after crying, the 'things will get better feeling'.

I suspect I picked this image for the reason that it looked less true and therefore less vunerable. I had narrowed it down to 3 images but discounted the others as this one had the 'nicest' face.


These are the 3 i was choosing from. Maybe i just picked to wrong one!

Also, i was trying to get the image to express the feeling in this poem

Conviction

I’m trying to convince myself that I am not alone,
The curses and prayers that to the wind I’ve thrown
Over years have reached the only person who
Can take away my troubles and make my wishes true.
He will make the rainbow shine; the rain will cease to fall,
The skies will clear and I’ll have no need to call
Into the wind longing for some despairing sign
That misery is elsewhere that not all grief is mine.
Look into my heart and soul, before this struggle mar’s
All the joy; the love and leaves but deepened scars.
A heart that could breathe and a mind that could think
Drowns in emotions that push me to the brink.

Giving up would be so easy, if I could let these demons win
But letting them destroy me would be my biggest sin.
The battle may continue, but the war’s already won,
My demons were defeated by God’s eternal son.
The loneliness and doubts I feel I know are Satan’s lies
For I have felt the love that shows within my Saviour’s eyes.
And though I face a dark world I know that I can cope
He has my hand to strengthen me; to let me knows there’s hope.
I am a precious child of his and he will never leave
So no matter what life throws at me this truth I do believe,
I may walk the path less traveled, run the longest race
But I can do all things through Jesus and His grace.
April 14th, 2010
I prefer the whole body shot, the mouth looks more sad
April 14th, 2010
In my opinion, if you wanted to convey hopeful, you may want to either looking slighty up or slightly to the side. It gives a more thoughful feel and if you feel that little bit of hope, you may get a very slight smile that will meet your eyes. Something to play with. I will follow you to see what you come up with. =) And I hope that things are getting better!
April 18th, 2010
Emotion is a bit tricky to get right in photography, it is all about body language as well as expression. EG misery, - hunched shoulders, head down.

The setting can also help convey emotion. eg isolating the subject from a group of people would help convey lonliness or isolation.

The poem talks about jesus, perhaps a setting with the subject clasping a bible or rosasy or something to their chest like you would a teddy bear with the mascara runs and a slight smile. Thats what i would shoot for the poem.

HTH
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