Only change I'd make is clone the wall behind him so the darker areas that extend out of frame become the same color as the adjacent area closer to the man.
ok, I'll throw my 2-cents in: I think a bit more light on your subject's face would help. Maybe if he'd held a reflector? (or try it in post). I agree with FotoBlah re the left side of the frame. Hope that's helpful.
Thank you . I am a neebie, can we do post for our pictures?, most of mine have been straight out from shoot.
and I love having my pictures critiqued, it helps me become a better photographer.
Ditto to most of the above- definitely black and white! Clone out the distracting black areas on the left, then convert to black and white. See what that does to the back ground first. You may not have to do any further editing as black and white is very forgiving. Once in black and white with the background even in tone, bring out the texture of his face with contrast (work slowly and lightly with this keeping his dark skin tone in mind) and light. That will also increase the emphasis on his eyes, which is what drew you to take the picture. It's a great portrait! And yes, you can process to your heart's content here- in fact there are several "challenges" (sort of like picture games) which encourage it! What Would You Do? (WWYD), the composite challenge, and ETSOOI (Edit the Silliness Out of It) to name a few.
and I love having my pictures critiqued, it helps me become a better photographer.
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