(Sorry about this, but I spent all morning clearing fallen trees and went to a friends funeral in the afternoon, so the creative muse and I have only been on nodding acquaintance today. Note to self: Write out 100 times - "I must try harder.")
I think it's original, and funny. And eye-catching. I like the play with light and shadow too. Don't know why you'd need to try harder; especially on a day like today. I'm very sorry for your loss.
I am sorry for your loss.